first, my feedback for the day... here


okay.. so this drop.. was for the topical tourney, the topic was "on the last string"... i'm new here.. it said drop by aug.22nd.. and it's barely 11pm here (still aug 22nd) in Los Angeles.. but I guess it was a different time zone, because the thread closed before I got a chance to post (hence my 0-1 record... BOO!). Anyways, I figured I wouldn't let the drop go to waste... and just post it here, for everyone to see/critique.. enjoy!

__________________
my verse ---> <--- your verse