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10-18-04, 07:35 AM | #11 | |
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decent stuff here, i've seen better from you but not bad
everything was intact for the most part..you had some vocab working and the flow was on point except for a stretched line or two, but i think you could benefit from digging a little deeper content wise..not to take anything away from yer work or anything like that. i just would have liked to have seen you tap into that real creativity to really grab the reader's attention..regardless props man n keep at it
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