I am a poet but I secretly want to be a rapper. Here is a song that I'm working on. Tell me what yall think

It's a shame how nigga's dillegent in ignorance
Being fake thugs through made up experience
Wanna bust slugs in front of the camera lens
Wanna act tough, put on a show for camera men
But even when the show's done
The beef is still real
Acquiring new foes from posing in videos
Being safety concious to feel safe from being killed
Wearing vest to immune themselves from bulletholes
Disrespecting the game
No purpose to be proposed
Pulling shit out they ass
Cause the desperate for metapho's
Piecing together lines
Pressed for rhyming words
Then yall label it hot
Cause intentions were deffered

It seems if it dont make sense/Dollars it make mo/Deep words is lost on crowds cause yall refuse to elevate/Yall might chew but yall dont digest the intake/Cause ignorance is friend and knowledge is foe

It's a shame how concious rappers sounding cliche
Renounced the party and bullshit
But saying the same thing
"The revolution wont be televised"
Why wouldn't it be
Blacks revolting sounds like a media frenzy
Sounds like an anchormans wet dream
But yall just light inscents, become vegans and smoke weed
Constantly staying blunted off more than reality
Cause real's such an obsession it's starting to be fake
Then I come real and everyone's mad at me
Cause they all too self righteous to see their mistakes
So full of themselves
They got led astray
So full of shit
They think the shit that they make
Is hot shit
But it's just shit
End of the day

It seems if it dont make sense/Dollars it make mo/Deep words is lost on crowds cause yall refuse to elevate/Yall might chew but yall dont digest the intake/Cause ignorance is friend and knowledge is foe

What do yall think honestly...

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Politics and politrix are the same thing because the whole point of the political process is to trick us into giving a particular candidate our favor. So why do people feel so clever when they use the word politrix?