good shyt fiya!... i'm impressed with this being ya first audio drop!... ok... ya verse was on point as far as the lyrics go... i heard dudes who couldn't flow with the beat the way you did and they claim they good and been doing it for a grip... so props for that... flow and lyrics...

only thing i saw that really needs improvement is ya delivery... put some more feeling into it... act like ya in a heated argument or sum'n... whatever ya gotta do to put that sum'n extra in ya joint... soft voice don't matter if you tryna come hard... ya shyt'll stand out if ya really mean what you spitting... try practicing in different tones... and change ya inflection on certain parts of ya verse until ya feel comfortable with it...

other than that... keep doing what ya do and fuck da haters... you off to a really good start