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| Phenom | Kingz | Dabatos | TonySelf | Tha Q | Half Breed | Tito | 7th End | RV Radio  |
01-11-05, 10:18 PM
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C-bo: nice piece, i felt the it a bit. it was a bit weak as you began to undergo the emotional aspect of the tale, but the rational & logical feelings were included. remebering my own past of neglect, there have been times people gave me hope, so i fully understand that the story his legit. but you only brinked the basic, you didnt cross the norm border. nice work, undoubtedly.
Final: good work, you obviously spent much more time & put twice the effort into your literacy. value of work is important as well as effort. you reached the forty line limit, which tells me you want to be around for round two, your actual piece was good. you have some strong views. i liked the overall picture. congrats. vote: Final
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