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05-20-05, 01:57 PM
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This was a decent drop.. could have been alot better.. if
you would have used some creativity.. "Hard times".. A very commen topic, but you didnt express in good wording , how hard those times were , and what happen to you in those times You did say why it was hard times , but i just felt you could have elaborated more Structure was off, it wasnt hepling the reader at all.. Vocab and worplay usuage was decent, but could have been alot better. ..keep it up
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