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| Phenom | Kingz | Dabatos | TonySelf | Tha Q | Half Breed | Tito | 7th End | RV Radio  |
05-21-05, 10:14 PM
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Eh.....this was pretty weak , could have been alot better..
Your structure was off.. could have been better... try to line up youir bars, and next lime use alittle punhclines....Wordplay was decent The main thing you should focus on it your structure .. try to make wel worded verses... nice punchlines couple of meta's and bam good verse 
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