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Old 06-18-05, 02:49 AM   #16
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Originally Posted by sabotage
look...its not all about vocab.....this isnt an english class.....

...okay ya verse here seriously wasnt that good..ur verse flowed well and everything was even but you really didnt have any punchlines..punches are meant to hit the opponent hard and none of those lines did that..yeah ur ok with the multis but if u title ur verse "punchlines to sabotage" then come out with punchlines..

thats real feedback.......

seemed like a long run on sentence to me...
i mean you can ryhme but the punches needed some
refinement n rewording to be considered punches
maddrapper...is this supposed to be audio...or are you text?
what gives..? cuz alot of what you put in there wasnt
relative to the entirety of your bars n verse as a whole...
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speak of biting, then you fucks flip everyone of my damn concepts
what the fuck, was you high..?
did you think i wouldn't recognize lines that i made
then you come up some bullshit tryna prove that im gay...!
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