Originally Posted by Deranged

Voted For: Tony Green

Tony Green-Nice drop here.Followed topic nicely.Liked the twist in the storyline at end of the verse too.Flow was off at points(mainly the end)... due to some lines not rhyming.Like this one
"I made 6 figures the concert's still going on....
The only connection to my stickly mother is my cell phone"
^^didn't rhyme.
But at the beggining..there were some internals n shit that flowed nicely.Not a very complex verse here...but still good.Keep it up.

One step beyond-Well...you had a more complex verse with metaphors and such.More direct with the topic and shit.But...i didn't enjoy it as much as I did to Tony Green's one.Flow was your biggest problem.Too many lines didn't rhyme at all.Had a good vocab...so that's good.But it didn't really impact ur verse.

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