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Status 5 83.33%
sabotage 1 16.67%
Voters: 6. You may not vote on this poll

 
 
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Old 09-05-05, 08:39 PM   #16
LyricalMa$tamind
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Voted For: Status

Status

You’re getting sabotaged by viruses on your way to internet fame
Cuz you couldn’t elevate in these streets if you where David blane(NICE OPENER)
The way you only do text its like you don’t have an esophagus
Or maybe in audio your existence isn’t wanted like foster kids(DAMN NICE ONE)
Don’t mean to self glorify but get the message, im dope
Can kill you with out touching you like second hand smoke
(IIGHT CLOSURE)

Status- u had sum hard punches n ur shit flowed nicely. U cudda done betta on da closure but da was da only flaw in ya verse. Nice use of personals n punches da hit hard.
8.5/10


Implicit

This kids rhymes smell like the bathroom..Makes me shout in horror
Like toilets used by Fat Bastard his Status is Out Of Order*
(1st line wuz wack but i wuz feelin da 2nd line)
You from Sacramento? Ha! I'll let it dawn on you, see
Cause you might be a Lil Scrappy but you still Not A King**
(ummmmmmm no)
You're equivalent to your sports team..No I'm not a hater
Cause The Kings would never be able to beat me..Even if I Peja(paid ya)***
(meh closure)

Implicit-u came out weak here. Sum of da punches u threw cudda been betta if u used ya wordplay betta. I wuz feelin sum of ur lines but it didnt really look like u tried dat hard in dis battle. Ur structure wuz str8 but u jus need ta work on throwin sum harder punches n personals dat really hit n u b iight. Not a bad verse but u cudda done betta
6/10

v/Status for comin harder w/ betta punches n personals
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