I like this, had a very good vivid of emotion and the flow was good. The approach you took was played out in my opinion but the wordplays you put in your verse made it more interesting...keep doing that..putting more meta's similies and wordplays in your verse and you'll become a dope writer..The best aspect of your piece was the Emotion..Keep dropping.

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