Hmmm...I liked this om..nothing too special I thought your flow was your strongest point of this om,....um your vocab usage I thought was decent because it helped out your imagery...which in return kept the piece interesting...I think you could have maybe have made your piece longer and maybe elaborated more but besides that I think you stayed on your topic in Overall was a well read Good Job..

7/10...

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