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02-08-06, 11:21 PM | #17 | ||
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i really didn't like some of the lines...well, for flow wise...other than that, it was okay
Kill em cold blooded without a clue of death in my techniques best line in there, i thought you kinda strayed from your topic though, i really like what you did at the end, or whatever, near the middle to the end, where you started questioning beliefs, but i don't think your whole piece tied in with that.....but, thats just me not bad, keep up
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