V/ - Red Bull.

Red - Your topic was cool, and you approached it well. I cant really say much about it because you had a very picture perfect poetry style verse here. Um, imagery was very nice, wording was good, vocab wasnt too flashy or elegant but it was good.

Shodown - You picked a played topic kind of, and thats what killed it for you. Everyone that picks a topic like this, comes the same way, and has the same view and approach to it. You didnt have much imagery, not much of a flow, and I didnt like your vocab whatsoever. Sorry, no hate, just elevate.

Whoa at the the rhymage...^^.