This was alright i guess. It looks more of a track on a CD rather than an OM, but i guess you can do this too.

My life is paradox, stuck in limbo wit Demonz and beheaded Warlox//
deadly like a case of small pox, anthrax havin all of Hip Hop's pores locked//
manifested as a beast wit that Triple 6 tatted on my halo, disturbin//
unnervin issues flow thru my mind like decayin skin tissues, deservin//
any mistreatment cause the lack of knowledge to find a cure//
and rippin away any superficial intelligence infestin my breed is a chore//
unsure of why most niggaz wanna test the B.O.I. bloodline within I//
the Hellz Angel, Dream Shatterer similar to Pun befo he died//

Ah, cool analogies here bruh, your concepts were pretty cool. If this was supposed to be a track, then is pretty good overall. just add a different flow to it in some lines to switch up the tempo a bit. keeping the same flow throughout the piece is boring and played as fuck.

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