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Old 07-06-06, 05:22 PM   #16
TonyTone
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Most people don't think I'll go there but I'm sayin it.
If Virginity's a weapon...Rex is Armed & Dangerous.
...& Come on lil' ngga, be glad your life is mourned.
Cause I'll be whipping Rexless, 'til the Harzard lights come on.

Rell the rest of your verse was pretty solid too, just i dont think the concepts were worded as well as these 1st 2 bars. plus i cant quote your entire verse cuz then they wouldnt be actual quotes lol

vs

horrible wording, stretched lines, get rid of all the fuckin decoration n shit. like the "'s, -'s, etc. just makes u look noobish.

v/ rell for obvious reasons
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