wus good spul?... told you i got you son...lol...

on the real... this is deffo the...no... THE ... best ansane beat i've EVER heard.... i mioght have to jack this and do my own jump off to it...lol


anyways... the first thing i noticed was the similarities to Lose Yaself... especially in the hook!

verses were well mixed... nice clarity on all three... flow was a lil ehhh on the first verse at the beginning but picked up nicely... track seemed real honest... only thing i would say is get a lil more original with it... it's like trip said.... you still tryna come into your own... and once you find that spot where ya need to be you'll be amazed at the kinda stuff you can write.... for me.... it takes someone to get me angry or starting of the shyt talking to bring out the battlemode in me where the lines just get set to annihilation... i also do pretty good on tracks that involve personal conflict and truth...

you need to find out what makes you tick... what makes you dig deep for the right words and the right beats... you gotta acraft each rhyme... hell, each verse likre it's da most important story in the world... like it's something YOU lived thru or experienced... paint them pictures man.... and expand on ya topics... we all do more than just talk to the opposite sex, kick rhymes, and buy clothes and accessories... there's so much more out there...

but yo... you did ya thing and ya rode the beat well.... just find ya inner Spul and let that shyt shine on ya next track!

__________________

CLICK DA SIGGY