this was nice, you do got a good commercial sound, your voice flows wells over the beat. I agree with above, your breaths are very strong at times, not as bad as Immotal Technique, but still obvious. Lyricly its very nice, not amazing, but they are very solid.

The hook is hot, it is catchy and makes it memorable. The beat is also fits very well for the track.

This is what hip-hop needs more of, you have a commercial appeal with the voice, beat, and hook, but the lyrics still have meaning and still sound great.

Good Work!