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| Phenom | Kingz | Dabatos | TonySelf | Tha Q | Half Breed | Tito | 7th End | RV Radio  |
04-06-08, 01:32 PM
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IP:
At least this piece shows that you understand a rhyme scheme, but try not to have such a monosyllabic piece, try to include some multis and metaphors some other shit too dude, just keep workin on it.
5/10 - not bad for a new comer
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