Hey, im a new member here, not exactly sure how it all works, I'll post one of my old raps for critics to attack and maybe someone will fill me in on how it works around here. I used this in a verbal battle about a month ago.

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Ima gunna ask you nicely to quit all your whiney bitchin
if you can't take the heat get the fuck up out my kitchen,
Im like psychic cleo i see your dreams and I know what your wishin,
but my rhymes are so infectious they'll make it burn when ur pissin,
I'll break it down for ur bitch ass so just sit there and listen,

your rhymes move at the speed of doctor seuss
but mine are like a rapid dog let loose,
of the chain and in your brain,
every word I say hits your ass like a train.

Don't think because I'm a white boy i won't run up in your home,
send two to your dome
and nine to your spine
im an expert marksman guaranteed to make you recline.

now that you've heard my flow next time youll prepare
yeah grizzley you just got beeaten by a polar bear.