Society Verse, From an Asian-American Perspective

I’m just looking for some comments on my lyrics, whether it be good or bad. Just tryin’ see what level im at and where I need to be at. Let me know what yall think. Good lookin’ out yall.

Society’s blind at times, we express online what’s on our minds/ Mines is tryin’ ta find why, we droppin’ like flies and killin’ our kind/ Killin all kinds wit nines and knifes that take ties and lives/ Cut’um in pieces, the deceased is.. now filled wit holes, how we gonna beat this/ No disrespect but that Crystal Meth is the reason you meatless/ Now peep this, even wit the best vest on yo chest, you still couldn’t cheat death/ Tech to yo neck, inject ta dissect and leave ya breathless/ Hope you get this clear message that our streets is infested/ You gonna regret it, packin’ them tools and runnin wit fools you messed wit/ How you gonna chase dreams and greens when yo @ss is arrested/ Check it, there’s always ah biggah man ta stand where you stand/ Play yo hand, make that grand and set life to ah new plan/ I’m through wit these shoes, through wit the blues/ Through wit reading about who win or lose in da news/6/12/03

Why must I be black ta rap, white to be a politician/ Why must I be dissin when I throw in constructive criticism/ Part of lyricism is elevatin yo rhythm through mental mechanism/ Is Um?..yall wit me, then hit me wit some words of wisdom/ Brindalpitt says I sound like ah preacher, I’m just tryin’ ta reach ya/ Follow yo teacher, play sports on da court or remain on da bleachers/ On ah global radius, show who’s the graviest, no ratin’ this/ Come mo Explicit than Lady is, handle biz and blow yo Alias (What up Ex)/ From experience, any beef I ain’t hearin’ it, homie bury it/ Don’t’ be scary kid, or you’ll be bleedin from yo eyelids like Mary did/ Success cums hard like inmates… living ten years within gates/ You wanna control fate, change yo mind-state ta Bill Gates/ See I’m hungry ta bust, so I rap everyday except Christmas/ Seems like that’s the only day that ever seem ta missed us/ Check da blistahs, I’m hard at work tryin’ paint ah perfect picture/ Aim at getting’ richer, before reality it hit cha wit’ah Mark that says “Quitah”/6/13/03