OK, here's a lil somthin I wrote for my girl. Gimme some suggestions plz. Help out etc.

Intro (Spoken)
Girl, you're all I have in this world. Without you, I woudn't be nothing. I love you baby.

Verse 1
Baby your my Godess, my one an only. You fill the void in my heart, I'm no longer lonley.
You're natural curly hair and your brown eyes. Your lucious lips and your soft smooth thighs.
You put a hex on me girl, you're my whole life. Without you, I'd end it all with a slice of the knife.
That's how deeply I truley love you. You're my everything baby. It's true. I can't live without you girl, you're my boo.
When you're not around I feel empty. Then you come around and complete me.
I've never felt like this about anyone. From the moment I saw you, I knew you were the one.

*Chorus*
Baby you're my girl, my whole entire world.
I'll love you until the day that GOD takes you away.
Baby you're my girl, my whole entire world.
A lifetime together is all I need to survive.



That's all I have. I just started it. I usually just write raps, but I never show a sensitive side. Tell me what you guys think so far.