here is a verse i wrote for this song called
"the world dont hate chu"
i just finished it
give me honest feedback

i decided to make this the first verse

[verse 1]
i close my eyez and try 2 picture tha perfect world/
perfect house, perfect cars, and the perfect girl/
but perfection wont exist as long as this rock can twirl/
spin, rotate on its fuckin axis/
as of now, i dont kno wat tha word relax is/
im bout go nuts, start cuttin up shit wit axes/
its sad, but that just wat tha facts is/
2 things i fear most r, death and taxes/
but death always fuckin seems 2 come in first place/
tha clock iz tickin, thats y i fear each one of my birthdayz/
and wit my kind of luck, ill die one of tha worst ways/
slow and painfully, but when im gone, ill make sure tha curse stays/
and 2 strike anotha man wit struggles/
so he can kno wat its like, askin "y iz life fulla so many troubles?"/
tha worst part iz, jus when u think its gone, tha shit doubles/
leavin nuthin behind, except fire, brimstone, and rubble/

(chorus) every dog, every cat, every snake, and every bird/
we all live on this planet and have no reason 2 b scurred/
take a look around, and appreciate nature/
and remember shit iz fucked up but still tha world dont hate ya/
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