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09-24-03, 08:05 AM | #1 | |
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Worthy (First Piece, Please Crit)
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This will hopefully be made into audio, more bars will be added, my first audio project, and my first ever topical, its called worthy because of the beat which has a chorus of a woman talking/ singing!
Any crit would be much appreciated! Worthy ill show them im worthy of some succes in life/ show them i can get through the pain and strife/ perhaps one day ill grow up raise a family/ get a good job, nice car, big house, big TV/ pressure to get good grades, get a good job/ people need money so much they result in crime, they rob/ idylic life, call me a pessimist i dont think it exists/ people hating life so much they result in slitting their wrists/ suicide, homocide, im on nobodys side/ people swear the oath, lie, the crime they deny/ Why do they do it, to understand oh i try/ how could you want to make another human die/ i sit back see suffering and think what life is this/ people at 15 on drugs, joining gangs and having kids/ so little time so much pressure to succeed/ so many people not sharing, controlled by greed/ how can you let another man starv with no home/ how can it be ok to spend millions on a oversized dome/ imagine a world where everyone was the same/ no racist claims, no fame, no1 hanging there head in shame/ We are certainly Worthy of a better standard of living/ raise my hand to Tony Blair, make it better your forgiven/ to continue to try to get further in this life i shall proceed/ put my finger up to the non believers, theres chance to succeed/ Oversized Dome = London Millenium dome! Anything dont make sense ask ill tell, ive critted a few pieces! |
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