Hi im Newbie, and i wanna improve my skills. Just keep in mind im a beginner.

Here goes:

Cos Im lyrically da slickest rapper, got my drug money stashed in Cuba and overseas accounts in Bermuda

Im telling u now looks can be deceiving, with my smooth flow i got ur girl receiving all my semen while u keep dreamin about seamen,
stop looking secretly at sailormen, cos by now everyone knows ur bent, like a cheap male wh0re for rent, u only goin places where old ulgy rich men got dollaz to spent
so now ur trying to save ur face on da net, try to compete with da best, wannabe mc's tryin to put ME to da test?? --> but rest assured, son u won't be bored,
when u hear da guns clapping u betta hit da floor, listen up all u fakers lets make dis hardcore, dis will make me spill ur blood even more

I get my inspiration across da nation, cos im delivering class A's for addicts like u for ya daily lyrical hallucination

come against me and ill end ur family history, because on dis thread there is only room for ME and my true life story, wid ur b|tch a$$ lyrics ur just makin me feel horny, so that's why im gona explore u deeply anally cos i know u enjoy that gay $hit openly

Be a dumb guy, lets see how high u can fly before u hit da ground and slowly die
im already dead im just here to smack u flat on ur back, i dont approve of u injecting all dat smack, u a small timer, so just stick to low grade crack

And i wont rest,

untill i get you and ur crew addicted to snow and get u dancing around my pole like a cheap a$$ h0e,
u cant flow, u only gona end up da mortuary wid a nameless tag around ur toe as John Doe
cos mothertrucker ur too slow try to kill me and ill com for your soul, like da Brandon in da "Crow", you'll absorb my bullets whilst im smoking my homegrown

Thats right son i said homegrown, I own all da dope u buy of da streets, so think about that next time u be rolling da weed, cos on a daily basis ill be planting white widow seeds, haha you'll be needing my grass to put ur mind at ease cos wid these lyrics ill drown u in da deep

So son just remember after bringin out da Smith & Wesson, its time u remembered dis lesson, after all da violence there's only gona b silence......dont speak cos ill put u to sleep......

I dont mean no disrespect to nobody. Comments appreciated. If u think im lame, pls also explain why (puts flame suit on).