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Old 12-16-03, 10:08 PM   #1
blyndedsoul
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From: va
tears for a minute

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this is just something i wrote today, to cool myself off and i just wanted some feedback on it..nothin too special....

TEARS FOR A MINUTE
the tears only drop down from my eye for a minute
when i think about you i cry, then its finished
the heartache lives on inside, but i deny it
caws i know with time, ill survive, so i just hide it

this emptiness is a pain worth more than suicide
but the solid mask i am wearing tells you otherwise
only for a minute can these tears hold my defeat
then i come to realize, this life still is not yet complete

im still standing strong, and even tho its pretend
im no longer frightened to let this sensation end
people say im in denial, but my heart defends it
caws i've watched the tears drop just for a minute

aight thats it tell me what you think??oh and i kinda ended it too short in my opinion...so let me know if you think i should keep it going??...thanks....
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