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03-13-04, 04:42 PM | #1 | |||||||
Banned: Cheating
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First freestyle. Please read
IP: 7BE2 A0A1
Ok, I'm new to rappin'. And this is my first freestyle I created. Please let me know what I am missing and what I should take out, and all that other type of stuff.
Here it is: Your rappin’ technique, is not what you expected/ You like William Hung, famous for bein’ rejected/ Hearin’ your rhymes, I’d say it’s time to elevate/ Your girl be wantin’ me, so you forced to masturbate/ You just fuck around, wastin’ everybody’s time/ Don’t know what you was thinkin’, don’t know what’s on your mind/ You go around town wantin’ a beef wit a cat/ If that’s true, I’ll add two large fries and a dog wit that/ Don’t fuck around wit a nigga, that you can’t touch/ Or end up gettin’ your ass killed, on the hospital bus/ Yea, it’s true, that I fucked you up alright/ Like Michael Jackson, your face went from black to fuckin' white/ |
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03-14-04, 02:51 PM | #2 | |||||||
Banned: Cheating
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IP: C1DA C961
Really lookin' for some feedback. please.
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03-14-04, 04:25 PM | #3 | |||||||
New to RB
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IP: 6B42 7A6E
yo
that flow was tight kid............................................... ...........
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03-14-04, 07:08 PM | #4 | ||||
Suspended: Cheating
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im feelin it
IP: 75CE A0E1
that was some dope shit. im feelin that. keep it up kid. check some of my shit out on open mic. everything was good, but try to increase your vocab and your usage wit multies, and your punchlines. you had a good number of them, but its better to use them a lot more in freestyle. much love from demolish |
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03-14-04, 09:31 PM | #5 | |||||||
Banned: Cheating
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IP: 4577 CD9A
Whoa, I'm amazed that people like it. I know it ain't cool to doubt urself, but that's what I did. Anyways, thanks for the love guys.
Also, I really don't know what u mean by multi's. Somemore feedback would be much appreciated. |
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03-16-04, 09:19 AM | #6 | |||||||
Banned: Cheating
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IP: 03C2 3387
Nvm, I found out what it is. I really want to hear what other people think of this. plz
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03-16-04, 10:11 AM | #7 | ||||||
New to RB
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IP: 87E3 F209
go check your emergency thread, I did an example of multi's
Is this your first time rapping period? or your first net rap? |
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03-16-04, 12:16 PM | #8 | |||||||
Banned: Cheating
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IP: 03C2 3387
Well, earlier this year, I took some earlier rap songs, like In Da Club, and I took out all his verses and changed them with mine just for fun. Same with the chorus. After I did that for a few songs, then I decided to come up with my own rhymes, all by myself. So this is the first time I actually tried to make some rap. I'm turnin' 16 this July, so I have time.
Last edited by SPuL : 03-16-04 at 12:19 PM. |
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04-16-05, 06:18 PM | #9 | |||||||
I see dumb people
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IP: 3420 3035
lmao @ this.. *sigh* memories
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04-16-05, 06:41 PM | #10 | ||||
Banned: Biting
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IP: 5285 DC82
lol@ you being banned for cheating.
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04-16-05, 06:46 PM | #11 | |||||||
I see dumb people
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IP: 3420 3035
^shit happens, yo.
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KORV 2 Final 4 KORV 0 and KORV 3 Champion First 1-2-1 champ 3x Best Audio collaboration... (August '05-October '05) |
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04-17-05, 12:16 PM | #12 | |||||
I'm a closet fag.
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IP: A0C8 44A9
Quote:
Good way to put it..
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04-20-05, 02:37 PM | #13 | |||||||
I see dumb people
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IP: 180F 10F3
^weerd, yo. uppin' my first OM EVER!!!
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04-20-05, 02:41 PM | #14 | ||||||||
I see dumb people
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IP: 180F 10F3
Quote:
oh... lmao @ you bein' banned for biting
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