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Old 08-12-04, 01:47 PM   #1
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Got bazaar splendor like a bartender add a glad dash
Of brandy keep my cash handy but duck the sad trash
Sugar cums in layer like a plumb player with girl squeeze
Waist and seize lace even make bees chase and twirl these
Honeycombs, rip apart freaks and mark with streaks of chalk
Intertwine with winter wines come out drunk too weak to walk
My mind dim but rhymes trimmed like white lace on velvet
Dress, impress groups, test hoops in basketball haven’t fell yet
Devastate like storms and lacerate cats arms like a bear claw
Compare flaws with good grammar in the streets a pair of jaws
Speak and seek hustle. Rap wise and sincerely but criticize severely
Like coaches do teams their approaches are keen so recognize clearly
No doubt flow clout sometimes without flavor twisting ruff
And missing stuff like the homeless that type loneliness is tuff
Fun is tragic if done by magic wonder can a fairy godmother
Do a Cinderella for this tender fella girl marry an odd brother
I live corrupt and fiery give up entirely abandons hope now
Make random notes to myself end up rhyming dope somehow
All my art scarred but still end up on hallmark cards, stressing
On course lessens the force abate pain educate brain addressing
The Source Magazine, erases abbreviations or faces deviations
Can’t understand quotes my plan promotes funk and appreciation
With verbal persuasion, renounce power of kings, bounce and tower
With bling even flower blooms bring sweet smell to streets of hell
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Old 08-12-04, 02:15 PM   #2
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nice overall
the way i see it it doesnt really match your title
its ok thought i liked it
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Old 08-12-04, 03:07 PM   #4
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Quote:
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Make random notes to myself end up rhyming dope somehow

Lol, that describes his peice.
just a bunch of random notes.
you have to make sense when you make a song.
next time, put a topic together, and stay on that 1 topic.
peice.
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Old 08-12-04, 04:21 PM   #5
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