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08-10-04, 07:13 PM | #16 | |||||||
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willa...i was really feeling the peom, but for the peotry league....it didnt really fit........now i can undertand u writing a poem story and then bringin in the "write about the picture" part....but i think u could have went about it in adiffrent way, so there for it wouldnt seem as if u went off topic. Becus when u first read your poem it has nothing to do with the picture...untill the very end.....and truthfully i didnt really want to read all that, it was a waste becuz it didnt have much to do with the picture. What i think u should have did was write a poem story and the scene of the story could have been where that picture was.....that would have stayed on topic much better.
Now as far as prodigy.....you stayed on topic.....ya poem went well with the picture and i was feeling it for the most part both poems was really hot, but becuz prodigy went str8 to the point...talked bout the picture....my vote has to go to him 1
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08-11-04, 07:39 AM | #17 | ||||||
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Votes 1-1 come on people & thanx mizz for the vote.
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08-11-04, 08:45 AM | #18 | |||
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Wow, I'm Actually Losing Points For Creativity...
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08-11-04, 03:32 PM | #19 | |||||||
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umm i dont fel like typin sooo this is a good battle........both came strong but ima have to givre it to Atticus for the more creative emotional verse.......NEXT TIME YOULL DEF WIN IF IT RHYMES pz...
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08-11-04, 04:53 PM | #20 | ||||||
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Alright 1-2 to Ab thanks for the vote..
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08-11-04, 10:06 PM | #21 | |||||
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Willy Wonka (atticus):
I Was Really Feeling Your Verse For These Reasons...It Was Probably The Most Creative Pieve I Have Seen On RV...If You Really Thought About It He Did Write About The PIcture....He Wrote About What Happened To Him... And What This Picture Made Him Feel...And It Made Me Feel The Same Its A Desolate Setting....The Structure Was Really Choppy Though...Definately Work On That...Decent Wordplay...Another Good Aspect Of Your Piece Was The Vocab And How You Described Everything Including Every Little Detail...And That Gave Your Piece A Sense Of Depth...Imagery Was Pretty Good And Everything Came Together Well Overall : 7.5/10 Prodigy (magic): Your Imagery Was Amazing You Also Well Very Detailed...How The Sky Was...How The Waves Hitting The Shore...Very Good Imagery....Your Structure Was Also Choppy.. Try To Even Up Your Lines A Little Better...You Have Alot Of Potential In Topical Writing I Just Dont Feel You Used Every Aspect You Could To Make Your Piece Better....First Of All You Should Have Wrote More....You Definately Could Have Won.. 2nd You Should Have Used Better Vocab And More Emotion...But Besides That Your Verse Was Pretty Good Overall : 7/10 Vote: Willy Wonka
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08-11-04, 10:38 PM | #22 | |||
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08-12-04, 02:38 PM | #23 | ||||
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Atty(willy):
well I loved that drop I was expected it was gonna be hott and It was like I suspected lol aight lets break it down.. you flow was flawless it was well done in the entire thing. creativity was there I liked the story you told in it..... the concept was str8 crazy madd hott as usual............. emotion was great I could really feel it in your words mayn depth....you ripped it hott again......................... overall: 8.5/10 Magic(prodigy): nice drop I was feeling it I didn't know what to expect from you because I never any of your drops lets break it down.... your flow was crazy and dope I loved it I was liking it..... creativity was nice could of been better both a story and... descriptive like in my opinion only I guess lol............. concept was great again it was CRAZY!!!!!!!!!!!............. emotion was good but I wanted more of that.................. depth well it went deep but I didn't feel much emotion...... overall: 7.5/10 Atty gets my vote since I liked his drop a little more...... but hott drops both ways ~RESPECT~.......................... and I am For$aken...
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08-12-04, 02:44 PM | #24 | ||||||
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Thanks for the vote whats that 1~4 haha its kool I thought
you come dark man respect!! Nice drop you come heavy on that I was really feeling it. Thanks for the feedback Flow & Un pointing out my faults could only make me better,, new to topicals aswell Peace. ~1
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08-12-04, 11:51 PM | #25 | |||||
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Battle Closed Willy Wonka Wins By KO 4-1
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