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09-20-04, 11:25 PM | #1 | ||||
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…..::7 deadly sins within betrayal::…..
IP: 511D E1B4
…..::7 deadly sins within betrayal::….. HIS Girl..as two we were united, n desired to hold our words as bonds, But time passed n my reliezation was that you wanted to move on, Not mere disappointment but shear fear, my world was crumbling, Rumours n plots veered against me as my heart was now stumbling, Enemies and Friends both conspired through visions of jealousy, why couldn’t we see that it was only us that choose the relevantcy, contradicting ourselves and blocking out the positive reality…?? all we really needed to do was concentrate on eachother shorty, damn…I told you in the beginning I wanted you past the last inning..! Is It over now?....it is..!!..... n aint neither of our feelings winning.. Do you remember..? Our last conversation lasted nomore than 5 lines… I cried inside, n even outside you saw that I was about to lose my mind, THE LAST TALK Him:……… gurl I love you ..you kno that, I would’nt hurt you like this.. Her:……..you say it but ya lie’n cuz you betrayed me, it aint hard to miss Him:…..don’t..! how can you believe them, there not your DAMN friends, Her:…..ive seen the pictures..! this is it, ive had enough n this is the end, Him:….. how can you say that, its not even me………………………………….. …………………………..…….please tell me why it’s the truth you don’t see…? HER ………………The foundation for this union was built so strong, We've been eachothers anchors, how could things go wrong, ………….All this he said/she said drama is makin my head spin, Who do i trust, if your out the door quick, when the phone rings, ………I confided in our friends about our struggles, our falterings, You were so eager to change subjects, couldn't handle my offerings, ……………Questioning my whereabouts,doubting my dignity, Thinking i don't need you, that i'd leave, this is killing me, ………….You didn't realize and blindly drove the knife, Naivity set in, i cried, analyzed,………..this can't be right, ……………….Your words hittin hard, don't say her name, I am the fool, not to recognize i was played by the game, ………………..Or how you said she wasnt really a friend, And i never thought this close connection would end, Did you not feel it boy, when my hands were on ya face?, I remember you lifted me so high, what is this unfamiliar place?, I let myself unfold on you, a victim to your embrace, Where did this all come from and how did it begin?, I'm lost alone and neglected, with betrayal, our original sin, WITNESS It was’nt to hard to manipulate insecure minds when ya trusted, N not a care in the world when I took two lives of love n dusted, I helped determine there fate and awoke 1 morning with a chill, He went on living 4 2 days until he pondered to meet a tracks grill, I destroyed there life, but yet could’nt end the togetherness eternally, When she got word she was the first to his bedside for the emergency, Both revoked there false betrayal to eachother and came to amends, Both understanding the ones soul passed with no unfinished business, See She could'nt go on either…………………………………… ………………… …………………………So I guess I envy them enough to have written this ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Collaberation by: fluidmoon & DV8
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09-20-04, 11:29 PM | #2 | |||||||
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.......hot shit fam...keep it up...yall reppin us good......Mind Kollide stand up....
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09-20-04, 11:30 PM | #3 | |||||
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ill as fuck, really good imagery, i liked the wording too.. Fluidmoon did a really nice job aswell, this was a tight as collab, keep it up..
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09-20-04, 11:30 PM | #4 | ||||
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IP: 511D E1B4
thanx fam...
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09-21-04, 02:22 AM | #5 | ||||
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uppin this for feedback com'on ya'll don't sleep on this piece.........
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09-21-04, 02:33 PM | #6 | |||||
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thanks y'all, uppin..............................1
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09-21-04, 04:10 PM | #7 | |||||
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I loved this piece...It is prolly my fav collabo....It just goes to show she said he said....fucks worlds up...and I cant stress enough how good it is...2 have a friend or sum 1 to love
Uppin for this collab Return the favor on my piece plz
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09-21-04, 05:14 PM | #8 | |||||||
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damn damn damn damn damn
that shit gave me the chilly willies mos def the kind of piece that i like good visuals of the feeling kept me reading to the end wich i thought was extraordinary |
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09-21-04, 11:20 PM | #9 | ||||
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^thanx...uppin.................................... ......
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09-22-04, 10:24 AM | #10 | |||||
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uppppppiiiiiiiiinnnnnnnnnnnnnnn.............
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09-22-04, 10:24 AM | #11 | ||||
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Uppin...........................................
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09-22-04, 09:34 PM | #12 | ||||
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uppin 1 more time...
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05-05-05, 02:14 AM | #13 | ||||
leave you rest'n pz's
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IP: 79B1 EDD4
Lol,.uppin This....fluidmoon Even Around Anymore?
Another Throwback..........daz Style..lol
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i'll play on ya consience, ya contents is complete nonsense
speak of biting, then you fucks flip everyone of my damn concepts what the fuck, was you high..? did you think i wouldn't recognize lines that i made then you come up some bullshit tryna prove that im gay...! . . fake fucks..move on...! |
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05-05-05, 05:01 PM | #14 | ||||
leave you rest'n pz's
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IP: 79B1 EDD4
this needs to be read and comprehended
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i'll play on ya consience, ya contents is complete nonsense
speak of biting, then you fucks flip everyone of my damn concepts what the fuck, was you high..? did you think i wouldn't recognize lines that i made then you come up some bullshit tryna prove that im gay...! . . fake fucks..move on...! |
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05-05-05, 08:13 PM | #15 | |||||
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word word, this was some deep, relatable shit, nah saying?....so much emotion, i could feel the pain and troubles this couple had to endure, then it all ending....bamm! just hits hard and makes you think....just loved the two different perspectives as well, really added to the overall effectiveness/message that this was portraying....
except im not sure, if the dude killed the chick because of the witness, or things were just forever broken? i didn't get that part, but everything else was top notch....keep up, word
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