http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=171565
this is going on my e.p.

bringing it to the studio in a month...


Just another dayyyy, to pass the timeee…
Just another wayyy, to spit a rhyme…
Were on the grind, but by night we’re out for fun…
In a city of a million, so let’s do something we haven’t done…

It’s a Friday night the light is lime, ‘So whatcha wanna do?’
Gone through, we did that last week ‘So whatcha wanna do?
I’m 20 and it feels like I’ve done everything twice…
It won’t suffice, whats the price to add spice to my life..

Seems like we always end up lounging in the cheap seats…
Watching DVD’s or weekly TV repeats
This is what I retain with the gift of a brain,
I wished to leave a mark on the world all I sees a stain,

Yet I remain in a happy frame of mind,
For one day I’ll find a time to show world I have a spine,
Maybe I’ll even see that I’m not a conformist,
But I guess that makes me a conformist trying to not be a conformist

If I’m not smart enough to be original then stop me,
Because it doesn’t interest life to have another carbon copy,
Like a floppy that got copied and pasted,
And a million O2 molecules just wasted.


u must drop a link with PROPER FEED-BACK with-in 24 hours or this will be closed....
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=170871

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good vers...ill leave better feed later...

good play with that. Well worthy of audio. Great vocab and you can see where the structure is layed out for an audio. I liked the flow all in all. My favourite bit:

Seems like we always end up lounging in the cheap seats…
Watching DVD’s or weekly TV repeats
This is what I retain with the gift of a brain,
I wished to leave a mark on the world all I sees a stain,

I liked this bit the best but all was good.

8.5/10

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dis was a good piece overall, def. not da best i've soon tho.....good vocab overall, nice multies n punches in there.....structure was iight.....8/10..keep up da good work