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Old 02-09-05, 04:59 PM   #1
PayDay
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I just don’t understand why I was put here on this earth
Why didn’t my mom and dad just leave me dead to berth?
Less than a year old and in a hearse wouldn’t have been a curse
Now so old and all I can feel is my heart burst

The girl who I thought I knew isn’t what I thought
She is taking over my thoughts and everything I am not
Death would be so great right now and it’s true
The things ive wished ive had, but now all I want to do is turn blue

To be buried so deep that I will never see light again
And not have to worry about shit until I ever breathe again
I want to hear the laugh of the devil deep in my ears
Drinking a fifth of absinth and all I hear is more cheers

To be in my own world to where I have no feeling
To have my nerves dead to the world and knee deep to the ceiling
Go ahead and put my head in the guillotine
Make my pain go away like some sort of routine

Nail the coffin with steel so that death is all I will ever feel
I should have followed my brother and decided to deal
At least I wouldn’t have had any cares in the world
And no girl to ever picture dancing and doing a twirl

So take all that material shit and shove it up your ass
I don’t want anything from any one of you except for you to pass
Go ahead now and step near me and your flesh will cut from the glass
I want to hear your cries, and then you will understand my past
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Old 02-09-05, 05:03 PM   #2
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Old 02-09-05, 05:09 PM   #3
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yo it's good i'm really feelin this shit but u had only a few multi's and a little more and it'll be totaly hott, i'd rate it 9/10...and yo i know u left feedback already on "Complexity" but check the last thread i did and read it...it might be sumthin u be interested in
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Old 02-09-05, 05:22 PM   #4
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thanks fam...i will rework that and make it FIRE...still uppin
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Old 02-09-05, 06:55 PM   #5
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str8 up fire...im feel'n it

7/ 10 this in nice
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Old 02-09-05, 07:10 PM   #6
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All I can say is nice, fire, & tough.
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Old 02-09-05, 07:38 PM   #7
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thnks...uppin this shit..i will return favors...just leave a link...~1~
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Old 02-10-05, 12:49 AM   #8
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uppin the shit yo...this is real true emotions...dont let this sleep
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Old 02-10-05, 01:00 AM   #9
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ok i sketched through it i'm a bit tired...and it was a decent drop..nothing too special...work on ya vocab a little bit and some of the word-play....
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Old 02-10-05, 01:13 AM   #10
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naw man....that shit isnt sposed to be special...its true shit dogg...make sure if you leave feed you understand this shit ya feel...~1~
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Old 02-10-05, 01:25 AM   #11
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nice drop..i could feel the emotions flowing there...keep at it...
give it a 7/10
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Old 02-10-05, 11:10 AM   #12
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uppin this shit...i will return the favor
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Old 02-10-05, 11:24 AM   #13
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i was feelin dis shit fam...i be feelin da same way sometimes...*maybe a remix in works?*...only i u want to...PM me or catch me on AIM my nigga...doebagz104...i should be on there tonight...but yeah...dis was good 9/10...get at me for my part in a remix...if u want

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Old 02-10-05, 09:45 PM   #14
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upppin this shit
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Old 02-11-05, 08:45 AM   #15
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Sup man this was a pretty dope verse, have alright vocab, Nice flow
pretty gripping...

not bad stay up

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