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Old 03-02-05, 10:57 PM   #1
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"Falling Apart"

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(Hook)
Yo i jus wish i could start from da start,
Cuz sometimes it feels like me world is fallin apart

(.:BlazE:.)
Yo 5 years ago i lost one of my best friends, I jus wish dis world would hurry up and end,
Found him wit a rope around his neck cuttin into his chin, now left with a funeral to attend
All these people blaming society, look back on wut my dad said "ill be back" i ask why he lied to me,
I jus sit and wish its not reality, and think how can i make it threw da struggle wit all dis anxiety
Make'n money by slangin drugs in school, but fuck it I look back and see dat dis world is crewl,
Da otha day my homie tryed to play me like a fool, not long before i set dis fire off wit all dis fuel
All these young teens out here strung out on meth, da only thing they not seein is death,
Runnin from da cop gettin caught out of breath, im gonna get shot on da spot endin up a sudden death
I been formaly ploting my suicide, but when i bring out da gun my balls jus run and hide,
My life is jus one big down hill slide, i ask god why do we have to live wit gun on our sides
Dawg im bout to start to retaliate, blastin at these foolz blackin out and cant concentrate,
Aint neva goin to make it to heaven at dis rate, shut da fuck up wit ur fake bling call gold plate

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Yo i jus wish i could start from da start,
Cuz sometimes it feels like me world is fallin apart

Yo dis is fuckin syck......leave da feed......Pz hate if u want but i think its tight
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Old 03-02-05, 11:01 PM   #2
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Open Mic Of Da Month right here leave some feed..........Pz
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Old 03-02-05, 11:09 PM   #3
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Old 03-02-05, 11:18 PM   #4
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Yo come on lets get da feed dont sleep..........Pz
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Old 03-02-05, 11:27 PM   #5
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it was cool simplistic but effective...nice story tellin...uppin on the skills tho...sound like a spit to audio...but nice keep at it...

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Old 03-02-05, 11:29 PM   #6
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Good lookin at homie............................Pz uppin dis shit
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Old 03-02-05, 11:39 PM   #7
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the "why he lied to me" line was hot......i felt that you started off great...but kind of fell of at the end with the emotion....the was a pretty nice verse here though....i give it a 6/10
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Old 03-02-05, 11:40 PM   #8
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Thanks fo da feedback homie..........Pz uppin dis shit homies
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Old 03-03-05, 12:45 AM   #9
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^ yeah, nice drop, i was feeling, but yeah, i think you didnt try as hard at the end.haha, cause the start was hot....just keep up consistency in your works and you should be good.....^^^^yep, liked the father leaving line as well....same with the fuel one....nice drop.......rtf!!! fugga
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Old 03-03-05, 06:20 AM   #10
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Old 03-03-05, 01:24 PM   #11
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yo man i was defintelly feelin this shit this was deepw tih emotion nice vocab and very good flow this should be open mic of march
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Old 03-03-05, 04:07 PM   #12
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Old 03-03-05, 04:24 PM   #13
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ya..same here..I felt u started off good and kinda fell off at the end...but it was good...I think next time u should try and add some more emotion and imagery...because to me this is more of a spoken word poetry type of peice...
and yo return the favour on my om...I just dropped this fresh like 2 minutes ago...it will be much appreciated~one~ stay up son...

genocide sickness(part one) the beginning

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Old 03-03-05, 05:05 PM   #14
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decent drop here.....yeah that "he lied to me" line waz hot tho.....nice story to it stayed with that whole idea throughout the whole thing.....good shit here 1 keep it up....
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