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03-12-05, 02:54 PM | #1 | ||||
I walk & walk over you
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Falling- I've fallen onto the darkness, as where i can not see my future The power of sins, Bounding me tightly around my soul, it can't breathe Ever since i've putted my bible down and center my thoughts i've lost track of god Where is your hands o great one? Please save me, what do i have to do to get you The devil power is highly so remourseful, having no emotion or care for anyone I need my devil palms in your hands god,please remove the "i dont love god" curse Devil turned me into an addict, made my heart black, and devilish of all,removed my love ones Turned my tears to the color of red, so i forever more, my visions will always be blurr to light Just sitting in the darkness, with my future non-existent and my love in my hear went away (asked him self) What do i need to do to get out of this? (GOD) BELIEVE MY CHILD, BELIEVE Saved by believing- Faintly my heart is dying in the darkness of this bounding shell It's hard to crack, but god said the only way to remove it is to believe Believe in what? I dont believe in anything good, and my heart is black There wasn't one happiness in my life, nothing made me smile or laughed . . . . . (GOD) BELIEVE MY CHILD . . . .. Believe in me, that i will help you get out of this Believe in tha outcome, there will be happyness Believe in my powerd that your soul will be pure Believe in my hands that i will make your visions clear . . . . My head and my heart of black with devilish powers is gone As I hold the bible in my hand, thank you god for telling me to believe
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03-12-05, 03:58 PM | #2 | ||||
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aight,
Imagary and the descriptive way you expressed yourself was good. Even though this was a good poem. I didn't enjoy it as much as your others. Since I'm not a religious person so I didn't relate to it. but that aint your fault.Good job,respet.
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03-12-05, 06:10 PM | #3 | |||
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IP: 28AD 5545
i think you coulda did betta even doe it was good but you had betta ones you had yo emotion dere it was good but not great i still liked it doe
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03-12-05, 06:15 PM | #4 | ||||
I walk & walk over you
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IP: 0ED6 300A
Yeh aiight, uppin for more feedbacks
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