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04-23-05, 12:38 PM | #1 | ||||||
..::shut the fuck up::..
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sick within
IP: E197 1C6C
somebody get me out this place let me vanish away without a trace To much to take hearts ripped and torn let me out here so i can now reborn the pressure is making a me hurt deep inside the pain is deep within u can see it in my eyes I stay up and watch the skys thinking about all these forbidden lies everyday I cry at night sick of the sight nothing is ever gonna be alrite leave me alone cuz the pain has got to stop everytime i get up my body feels a sudden shock anxious with not a sense of confidence sick of bein abused these words r my only defence understand ive never done you ever wrong how can i get better when im never strong im tried of all this stress why do u always test my anger will cut your wrists you know im blessed you don't know exacly how I feel with all your problems ya makin me Ill how to I survive this is like mental torcher every single thing ive done is out of order how do i get out this big black hole why is it dat everything u say got 2 be cold I can't with hold it's way to much to take i wish i was in a dream and could never wake it's like a dream nothing is what it seems the problems are endless this cannot be your makin me weak sufficated by depression there you wonder why i have so much agression theres 2 many questions this world will beat you but i refuze to be the one that u defeat to im not the type of person ur gonna speak 2 I fucking hate you i wouldn't wanna meet you to be an emcee you have to require skill cuz my sick thoughts will leave ya in higher fields lyrically medically and mentally unstable you know im going far im just able your not gonna take me under my imagination is gonna hit like thunder |
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04-23-05, 02:39 PM | #2 | ||||
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IP: 3240 794D
Dis was iight flow was good wordplay was alright.....u stayed on topic all da way through da verse....overall i would have to give u a 7.5/10.....~1~
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04-23-05, 03:29 PM | #3 | ||||
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IP: 3240 794D
This Was A Decent Peice , I Felt It Could Have Been Alot Better
I Felt You Could Have Used Better Vocab, Maybe Some Stronger Wordplay, Structure Was Pretty Good , Sorta Feel Off In The Middle. Concept Was Okay, Could Have Been Alot Better... Elevate On The Grabing The Alittle Better... And Try To Use Better Wordplay, And Vocab , Keep It Up Though , And Drop A Link Or This'll Get Closed
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