Phenom | Kingz | Dabatos | TonySelf | Tha Q | Half Breed | Tito | 7th End | RV Radio |
04-25-05, 03:31 PM | #1 | |||||
unknown legend...
|
my mind's ways
IP: 0F40 8178
fames outrage praised by my glory's raise
Im tamed but not lamed to the gory stage,im un-named an unphased teen smokes crack in his mom's face,what shame and in accordance I just watch the hussle not in any forces but I knock the huddle I'll take my place, thanks for your company my mind thinks like the eye winks, very mumbly and humbly I seize for a fitted but not grinnin just lookin for a job but am not winnin wantin rims spinnin and a good life to sit in like my shoes,which I need new but cant get em I need a new shortcut,I even need a new shorts,fuck im stuck,I cant figure out how to end this struggle I never been in a position like this but annoying trouble trouble on my mind for no reason,I cant believe it too much thinkin goin on,the answers are all there.... but I cant see it I need hope, I need a place they call heaven this is what's on my mind and it's all venom...
__________________
Unknown Legend... |
|||||
04-25-05, 03:32 PM | #2 | |||||
unknown legend...
|
IP: 0F40 8178
__________________
Unknown Legend... |
|||||
04-25-05, 05:27 PM | #3 | |||||||
a.k.a prozak
|
IP: C8F2 8CC9
yo this aight i've read better but u had some decent rhymes in ur rap nuthin that really touched me though..but keep it up and remain real i've noticed u werent frontin in this like some others in this site..just dont rap bout what u aint holmes and u'll do fine..add some more multis and make sure ta get a lil longer with ur open mics...i've noticed lots of you rappaz on this site is gettin a lil lazy when it comes to typin make sure ta perfect ur shit, make it interesting and add a hooks and 2 verses..but anywayz this shit was ok...6.5/10
|
|||||||
04-25-05, 07:05 PM | #4 | |||||
Flyweight
|
IP: 1D78 B378
i didnt really like this....it was like you were rhyming just for the sake of rhyming...there was no real story or plotline or moral to it or anything.... i dunno, it flowed nicely but eh.. i think this is something that would probably sound better on audio but eh...keep up
__________________
-O.G-
Only way out now...is in a box.
|
|||||
04-25-05, 07:36 PM | #5 | |||||
Cus I Jus Ma$fit Dis Shit
|
IP: 0066 32B0
hood said it...cmon adren, we both know dat u can do much better man...lets be serious...and by tha way, return tha fava (link in sig) and we need to collab again fam...but dis wasnt yo regular type shit nigga...1
-DB
__________________
Ma$fit |
|||||
Thread Tools | Search this Thread |
Display Modes | |
|
|