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05-05-05, 10:37 PM
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My Dick Stay Wet
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Rise Up (lifes cycle) HOT SHIT!!!!
IP: 28AD 5545
iight i aint done it yet...still workin on it but this is what i got
Rise Up (Lifes Cycle) Chorus 1 Should I Rise Up? just for me to fall again
Should I Rise Up? just for it to end again Should I Rise Up? just to begin again Ending it, its life cycle dat we livin in Verse 1 strongest cats surrenderin-in
drugs sex and lives is enter-in innocent lives bein stolen truthful words "hushed", contains, and unspoken souls painfully floatin watchin da world go by wonderin WHY? is it I that cannot fly contradictin statements be eruptin not even da government followin its own instructions eye for an eye, heart for a heart should known it waz there cuz it been there from the start repetively fallin, and rising back to our feet head on da swivel, live or die, we cant Rest In Peace Chorus 2 Should I Rise Up? just for me to fall again Should I Rise Up? just for it to end again Should I Rise Up? just to begin again Ending it, its life cycle dat we livin in |
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05-05-05, 10:44 PM
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IP: 0B82 1C9B
dude this is wack compared to your other drops....
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05-05-05, 10:46 PM
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My Dick Stay Wet
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IP: 28AD 5545
yeh i know..i wrote this when i was like half asleep in 4th period today..but i was like da concept is dope so ill post it and see what everyone thinks..ima make some changes to it tho...thanks for da feed tho......
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05-05-05, 10:50 PM
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IP: 0B82 1C9B
weerd ness and make sure you check my upcoming OM. keep it up... Its not liked it sucked totally.
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05-05-05, 11:00 PM
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in your system
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IP: 9E2F CDE8
meh, it was alright, nothing special, 2nd verse wasn't all that bad, except there wasn't really any content to this....just straight up basic free writing....anyways, it wasn't bad
keep up
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05-05-05, 11:05 PM
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IP: 7A2B FDE0
I didnt like your structure but i did like your syllable count. I think this would sound good on audio but it wasn't really a good read cause i can't feel the beat or the flow you're sayin' it to. also, it was short...real short. i also agree with kesse, i was feelin the second verse more than the first... not a bad drop tho...keep up
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2132560
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