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05-27-05, 09:26 PM
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Poet's Daughter.
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Loquacious FT. Shawty B (rb chik)
IP: FEA6 7CAE
Julius Caesar
Shawty B Autumn seasons lurks around me, with my heart attached
There’s a hole puncture through my heart, that can’t be patched Images with words, flies in my head, and it’s making me angry I can’t believe you did this to me…to only pleasure your lusty Why!? Whatever happen to us?…you forgot the word “loyal” Friends saying you cheat, now I’m trapped in a twisted turmoil Every-step I take, and every inch of wind I breathe, It increases The anger, and the desperation of wanting the truth, is in me I see your face in the depths of my pupil, it’s an cold stare But I’m being stopped by a friend, and my anger is being …………………………..Backed up like an receding hare I froze up in absolute terror as you stormed right towards me Some things going on, judging by your stride it's plain to see Contemplating running, I don't know what your mad at so I wait As you get close I see in your eyes focused on me, I fear my fate You get stopped by a friend, as someone taps on my shoulder I turn as they ask if I cheated on you and I'm suddenly colder My thoughts race, I know your temper, now whether to run & hind Or face up to you and tell you it's just a rumor & that I wouldn't lie So I stand and watch as you talk to your friend, the fear is creeping You snap your head towards me, I see in your eyes, tears are seeping I don't know whether your mad or sad, maybe you can understand Someone got mad that you father my kid and they wanted my man Just then you stop, and hate finds your eyes, and I'm lost in the traps I run and hide in safety from your rage that's as loud as thunder claps In the safety of my best friends arms, I begin to write to you, a letter In every hope and intention of making every wrong between us better When I saw your legs going the opposite way, I knew it. My heart scream with anger without the mouth attach with it In my mind, without a doubt that you truly broke the love chain You cheated on me, and left me with the poisonous of revenge I walked the other way, with my head held down, like I'm being hurt No, it's the antonym, the deeper I go, the deeper, the payback thirst The Tender of the leather seat of my car, does not calms my feelings Neither the leaked of my tears, they leaked to let out the good in me I ignite the ignition of my car, and I drove without even stopping The antagonism is like an drug and also like my car…I'm speeding *bump* I stop without an stop sign in my sight …My face went pale, as I saw the familiar body bleeding With quiver lips, my heart is bouncing in fear without an trampoline Got on my knees, saw this bloody paper…a letter…and it reads… I finally finish writing and begin to walk out to your car, and I can see you Hopefully you'll understand, why would I ruin what we've been through How could I be unfaithful when you took care of me since I was sixteen To lie to you and not love you with every bit of my heart is just obscene Just as I'm thinking this, my life flashes before me, lights flood my eyes Its your car I see and you hit me, apparently we can't find a compromise In an ambulance, I realizing that my death is creeping, and I'm so scared In my last breath I ask the paramedic to give you that letter & say I cared The letter that you later read explains everything that happened in school "Baby, I don't know what has gotten into people but ignore all of the fools No one matters to me more than my love, and our child that is soon to be You had held me so tight in each embrace and I felt safe, why would I flee Nothing can take me from you, temptation can no longer phase my life I wake up every day dreaming, I lay here grieving that I cant be your wife" It ran through my mind that I was going to die in a state of mind so spacious The last line of the note and my cause of death, "people are too loquacious" My heart rate monitor falls to the sound of an off key fife I've left you alone again without a child without a wife My fate had fallen that day, and I was left, without a life I finish reading, the ink from the pen, is wet from my tears I look up, I see bars, I see hell, I see myself being here ……………………………….............. ......for many years Post this shit 5 minutes ago on rb.......Topical callaboration League (2 vs 2), word i think we make a great ass pair.....  Too bad our opponents no showed  ~*Muah Love Shawty B aka HoneyBunn*~
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mystery Is a Freak!! ITawAPuddyKat: Yeah, I guess. But I won't be a Lesbo for life. Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8 ITawAPuddyKat: Well Yes, Yes I do. Smartone Freal:  ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u Smartone Freal: ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol Smartone Freal: lol sorry thats private ITawAPuddyKat: EWWWWWWW..*Sigged* |
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05-27-05, 09:33 PM
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Poet's Daughter.
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IP: FEA6 7CAE
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mystery Is a Freak!! ITawAPuddyKat: Yeah, I guess. But I won't be a Lesbo for life. Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8 ITawAPuddyKat: Well Yes, Yes I do. Smartone Freal: ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u Smartone Freal: ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol Smartone Freal: lol sorry thats private ITawAPuddyKat: EWWWWWWW..*Sigged* |
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05-28-05, 06:46 PM
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Poet's Daughter.
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IP: CA9A B7AE
Uppin for some damn feedback...................Shit......I worked hard on my part *10 min key*..
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mystery Is a Freak!! ITawAPuddyKat: Yeah, I guess. But I won't be a Lesbo for life. Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8 ITawAPuddyKat: Well Yes, Yes I do. Smartone Freal: ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u Smartone Freal: ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol Smartone Freal: lol sorry thats private ITawAPuddyKat: EWWWWWWW..*Sigged* |
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05-28-05, 06:58 PM
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The Paragraph President
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IP: 6BC9 4CDE
holy shit juelz you really learned a lot through shawty man your elevation is superior the stuctures from both of you was identicle your flow is very good good complexity inner rhyme scheme from both of you was not bad i thought shawty was more complex with the inner rhyme scheme but the outter rhyme scheme was good for both equally matched this was a very good piece from both of you.
rtf on mine Unburied Corpse
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05-29-05, 12:11 PM
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Poet's Daughter.
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IP: F46F 7D82
Uppin for some more feedbacks plz.......................
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mystery Is a Freak!! ITawAPuddyKat: Yeah, I guess. But I won't be a Lesbo for life. Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8 ITawAPuddyKat: Well Yes, Yes I do. Smartone Freal: ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u Smartone Freal: ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol Smartone Freal: lol sorry thats private ITawAPuddyKat: EWWWWWWW..*Sigged* |
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05-29-05, 12:17 PM
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==bLaCk-HanD==
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IP: 4F2F CBA3
Nice Peice Frum Yall, I'Unno How Dat Chick Izz But Her Vocab An Choice Ov Wordz Wuz Killing It, Really Enjoyable, Deep & Meaningful, Both U n Da Chick Wuz On Point Wit Da Structure & Emotion, Yall Bought It Live, Good Job!
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 ==I Don't Rhyme, I Just Explain Shit Real Good==
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05-29-05, 12:25 PM
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Poet's Daughter.
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IP: F46F 7D82
^^ WORD...................Shawty B is MY HoneyBunn if you know what i mean... lol.
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mystery Is a Freak!! ITawAPuddyKat: Yeah, I guess. But I won't be a Lesbo for life. Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8 ITawAPuddyKat: Well Yes, Yes I do. Smartone Freal: ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u Smartone Freal: ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol Smartone Freal: lol sorry thats private ITawAPuddyKat: EWWWWWWW..*Sigged* |
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05-30-05, 02:34 PM
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Poet's Daughter.
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IP: EC59 A4F0
Bump this up...............................................
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mystery Is a Freak!! ITawAPuddyKat: Yeah, I guess. But I won't be a Lesbo for life. Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8 ITawAPuddyKat: Well Yes, Yes I do. Smartone Freal: ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u Smartone Freal: ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol Smartone Freal: lol sorry thats private ITawAPuddyKat: EWWWWWWW..*Sigged* |
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05-30-05, 02:49 PM
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Champion
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IP: EED2 4F8F
Damn this pretty good, liked ure collab yall, 9/10, gd shit. RTF onb my Help me lord OM in my sig
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06-01-05, 06:35 PM
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Poet's Daughter.
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IP: 19E8 9BF2
Thanx bruh..........................Uppin for more feedbacks.
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mystery Is a Freak!! ITawAPuddyKat: Yeah, I guess. But I won't be a Lesbo for life. Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8 ITawAPuddyKat: Well Yes, Yes I do. Smartone Freal: ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u Smartone Freal: ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol Smartone Freal: lol sorry thats private ITawAPuddyKat: EWWWWWWW..*Sigged* |
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06-01-05, 06:41 PM
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IP: CF74 5D3A
Shower unique with power and heat like nuclear fission
Cats do fear collision with me while on a sincere mission Rhyme fly cool flow slam like a high school program In an effort to educate at a deft rate cool like slow jams Stay in school don’t stray fool grab a textbook and read My class ill like alternators bought the haters// a new creed Bring wet pain fast like methane gas, get your brain smash Like crushed peanuts if you be slut enough to try and whiplash this |
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06-01-05, 06:59 PM
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Poet's Daughter.
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IP: 19E8 9BF2
^^ The fuck you doing?............................................ .........
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mystery Is a Freak!! ITawAPuddyKat: Yeah, I guess. But I won't be a Lesbo for life. Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8 ITawAPuddyKat: Well Yes, Yes I do. Smartone Freal: ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u Smartone Freal: ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol Smartone Freal: lol sorry thats private ITawAPuddyKat: EWWWWWWW..*Sigged* |
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06-01-05, 10:34 PM
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Middle Weight
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IP: CF74 5D3A
art-stica~Mente this was a good pos ti enjoyed it bu ti find myself peeping and don't peeped back so could you peep this for me (http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=193550)
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06-02-05, 08:54 PM
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Hell yeah
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IP: E53B B358
what the hell MADDRAPPER?
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06-02-05, 08:56 PM
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Poet's Daughter.
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IP: C4D2 8E7E
^^ Word...............wtf madrapper?........................
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mystery Is a Freak!! ITawAPuddyKat: Yeah, I guess. But I won't be a Lesbo for life. Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8 ITawAPuddyKat: Well Yes, Yes I do. Smartone Freal: ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u Smartone Freal: ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol Smartone Freal: lol sorry thats private ITawAPuddyKat: EWWWWWWW..*Sigged* |
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