http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2184738

Not sure how many links i need
But please feed

Took Adam and Eve, deceived and relieved, yet shook
Read the book, God rested on the 7th and never woke up
Claiming Sanity, through humanity, creating calamity
Into Vanity, as fakes were unearthed, end of reality
To see no picture's, just scriptures, heavenly laws to abide?
How do we follow a book when we cant even read into our lifes?
About time, yet time stops at a click, pieces of life are in shatters
Escaping shocks, Yet im raping clocks to dick on all the matters
Statures of glares, coninsided with the abided statues of prayers
Life fares taxing despair, but im crawling to heaven, how ima make it upstairs?
Not fair G, Psalming fru New borns, To abort the fist in the storms
But im still norm, so like biblican snowstorms, still having to hail mary........

kinda deep, flow was on point throughout... seemed more of a poetic type of piece to me but yeah...wasnt a bad OM..

and tryout for LL man...

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I liked the flow on this, a hard topic to express since it nearly always has to be deep. Which this was, the multies made the whole flow slide. However you traded them for content, which you should never do. I feel this is a poem due to the fact a few lines dont rhyme. But still, this was v. good. Keep it up & return the favour on my OM "Colosall emotions".

I flowed through the whole thing the ends of lines may not rhyme but if u flow to it it definetly rhymed
Feed appreciated but if u read in2 it i def didnt sacrifice content

I give it up to you man, this was deep good shit Im feelin you, i give it 8/10, nice rhymin and nice topic, RTF on my two OM's in my sig please

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Feed appreciated ima bring fire with ma next drop

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not bad

flow was on point
ya had some nice multies in there
although the end was a bit off
it was pretty deep
a nice topic for an OM
and ya approached it well and dropped nice

overall 6.5/10


and Dizzee Rascal
YOU ARE A HERB!!!! WERD!!!!

Get Off Daubs Dick Chumpstain!!!!

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I spoke to daub for the first time today
Please dont call me a herb and if ur gonna set it up
However dope sig im soo unhappy i couldnt of been there
But apart from that
Daub's dick? i dont do that mayne and if ur gonna make comments ur gonna have to back them up nigga

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