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06-09-05, 06:42 PM | #1 | ||
Banned: For Being So Fly.....lol....my new account is Triple Sixes....
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The Tables Turned
IP: 473F 6D42
THE TABLES TURNED . THE REASON My mind had an advantage on my actions, total domination Couldn’t eat, my stomach was rumbling, just for a ration Eyes dried, no tears coming down my sullen cheeks No saliva in my mouth, lips dried, I couldn’t even speak Blasting sounds in my ear drums turned me deaf I’m blinded and muted should I just wait for death No I can’t let this go this way, I must take control Or just suffer my mind’s actions and his deadly soul . . . THE TABLES TURNED I battled a bloody fight inside my brain, head turned to a fierce war No bullets no guns used, just straight words in my mentality’s core Trying to stop my mind’s sins, have to recover my mind set But to get, what I want I have to let go, just brainwashed and forget? There must be another way so my right arm started to move, hand gripped Reached for a clip and inserted into the gun, blasted and my mind flipped My fingers slipped the gun and I can’t reach it, I’m almost done wit this That when my mind got pissed and shot a violent shot but missed Hopefully it did because I need to reverse this situation I’m facing Heated and strapped a plastic explosive to the nerve tissue blazing The scene racing, when will I take control? I need to wait until it’s weak Blasted another explosive, and it got shook, the blood in my brain leaked . . . THE CONCLUSION I finally got the tables turned into my side and now it’s all in the head The only way to get the tables turned is to risk my life and now I’m dead .
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STARTING 2MORROW I WILL BE TRIPLE SIXES THATS GON BE MY NEW ACCOUNT SO THATS ME AIGHT CUZ IM SO FLY......LOL |
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06-09-05, 06:43 PM | #2 | ||
Banned: For Being So Fly.....lol....my new account is Triple Sixes....
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IP: 473F 6D42
Links -
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=193994 http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=194486
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STARTING 2MORROW I WILL BE TRIPLE SIXES THATS GON BE MY NEW ACCOUNT SO THATS ME AIGHT CUZ IM SO FLY......LOL |
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06-09-05, 06:48 PM | #3 | |||||||
~*This Worldz A Sin So Why Hate Me For My Habits~*
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LoL ATCHA Conclusion!Yo man Nice Shyt Famz!ONCE AGAIN a Dope Piece!Vocab Was RIGHT THERE ON POINT!Wordplay was Good!Structure Was Good!Rhymin Was NICE!Stayin on topic Was on Point!like i said another dope PIECE!overall 8/10! RTF in my Collab with STANZA!Holla Atcha Famz!
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"This Worlds A Sin So Why Hate Me For My Habits"-Gh0st-
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06-10-05, 08:09 AM | #4 | ||
Banned: For Being So Fly.....lol....my new account is Triple Sixes....
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IP: 473F 6D42
yea thnx for the feed man ill feed on ye verse asap ok thnx
uppin for more feed
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STARTING 2MORROW I WILL BE TRIPLE SIXES THATS GON BE MY NEW ACCOUNT SO THATS ME AIGHT CUZ IM SO FLY......LOL |
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06-10-05, 10:57 PM | #5 | ||
Banned: For Being So Fly.....lol....my new account is Triple Sixes....
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IP: 473F 6D42
uppin for more feed cmon pplz stop sleepin need feed
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STARTING 2MORROW I WILL BE TRIPLE SIXES THATS GON BE MY NEW ACCOUNT SO THATS ME AIGHT CUZ IM SO FLY......LOL |
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06-11-05, 05:31 PM | #6 | ||
Banned: For Being So Fly.....lol....my new account is Triple Sixes....
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IP: 473F 6D42
upppin this lets get some feed
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STARTING 2MORROW I WILL BE TRIPLE SIXES THATS GON BE MY NEW ACCOUNT SO THATS ME AIGHT CUZ IM SO FLY......LOL |
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06-12-05, 12:42 AM | #8 | ||
Banned: For Being So Fly.....lol....my new account is Triple Sixes....
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IP: 473F 6D42
again ill u have done is said how muched my verse sucks while otha had enjoyed it and want to see me drop more if i see one more like this
i must report
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STARTING 2MORROW I WILL BE TRIPLE SIXES THATS GON BE MY NEW ACCOUNT SO THATS ME AIGHT CUZ IM SO FLY......LOL |
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06-12-05, 10:35 AM | #9 | ||
Banned: For Being So Fly.....lol....my new account is Triple Sixes....
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IP: 473F 6D42
upppin for more feed plz thnx in advance
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STARTING 2MORROW I WILL BE TRIPLE SIXES THATS GON BE MY NEW ACCOUNT SO THATS ME AIGHT CUZ IM SO FLY......LOL |
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06-12-05, 07:37 PM | #10 | ||
Banned: For Being So Fly.....lol....my new account is Triple Sixes....
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IP: 473F 6D42
cmon pplz lets get some more feedback aight yall
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STARTING 2MORROW I WILL BE TRIPLE SIXES THATS GON BE MY NEW ACCOUNT SO THATS ME AIGHT CUZ IM SO FLY......LOL |
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06-12-05, 08:10 PM | #11 | |||||
.. §eed Will §onn You ..
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this shit was aight like that otha nigga said u coulda put some time into it...seem like u rushed it a lil
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06-13-05, 07:20 AM | #12 | ||||
Odi et Amo
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Liked reading this piece, least I can say is you sure approached it in a creative way
Vocab was right on point, sometimes big vocab can ruin a piece but yours was suited for it, it only affected the content in a positive way. Emotion was very strong and raw, had some excellent imagery in there and the ending was very nice with a surprise effect. Keep it up man, I like reading your stuff!
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06-13-05, 09:27 AM | #13 | ||
Banned: For Being So Fly.....lol....my new account is Triple Sixes....
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IP: 473F 6D42
thnx u very much ill rtf asap
upppin this for more feed thnx
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STARTING 2MORROW I WILL BE TRIPLE SIXES THATS GON BE MY NEW ACCOUNT SO THATS ME AIGHT CUZ IM SO FLY......LOL |
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06-14-05, 12:21 PM | #14 | ||
Banned: For Being So Fly.....lol....my new account is Triple Sixes....
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IP: 473F 6D42
cmon peeps check this out and leave feed o it aight
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STARTING 2MORROW I WILL BE TRIPLE SIXES THATS GON BE MY NEW ACCOUNT SO THATS ME AIGHT CUZ IM SO FLY......LOL |
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06-15-05, 10:25 AM | #15 | ||
Banned: For Being So Fly.....lol....my new account is Triple Sixes....
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IP: 473F 6D42
ok lets get sum more feedback aight cmon uppin ...
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STARTING 2MORROW I WILL BE TRIPLE SIXES THATS GON BE MY NEW ACCOUNT SO THATS ME AIGHT CUZ IM SO FLY......LOL |
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