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Even as a star of a movie couldn’t be bazaar and groovy
On stage yall in strong rage to become rappers but you a newbie
Just dense no beauty don’t have a sense of duty but
Convince with booty of your girls that she can twirl
That coo-chee cute like juicy fruit so let me give a twirl
Rhyming is an ill occupation provided you fulfill your
Obligations try build up cooperation in this game galore