The Teacher
I respect you so,
'Cause you taught me so much
Just listenin' to flows;
Wheneva I was mad or sad I put on your tracks,
Wit' my first it was you who taught me tha facts,
Commandments that I live by 'til I chose to relax;
Concentrate on my rhymes and go back to school,
But no matter where I went I still listened to you;
So here's to you teacher, rap street preacher,
Lyrical leader Biggie Smalls,
The greatest of them all.

Dedicated to tha late and great Christopher Wallace
A.K.A. Notorious B.I.G. Thank you for your music.
One.

The Topic was unclear until the end, which i thought was nice cause it def. makes sense and it flows good. The rhyming could be improved, but since it's a poem with a very small verse, vocab would prob. complicate it. The Structure was good, although it could use some more help, since a few lines were half the others....overall it was good and a nice tribute to B.I.G.

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Open Mics

Hot Shit. Aint really understand until the end but thats a hot way of writin. Cant wait to see what you come up wit next Kid.

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FREE LIL' LAN

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