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See I don’t understand, this world sometimes
We got the Rich getting Richer, The Poorer getting More poor
50 People die in London, the whole world falls to the Floor
What about the Iraq war, innocents Dieing for what?
Hundreads a Day, Were’s there Moment of Silence
These Bombs keep there mouths Silent.
Hey, Don’t get me wrong, I love this shit
Imbedded Reporters, feed my killing Fix.
This Media source, fuels america’s wars
We tell the the whole story, No you don’t you whores
But it Doesn’t Really bother me, any
I’ll still strap on this Ak-47, And Hold it Steady
Blow this little afgan Kid holding his Teddy
No why, cause son I’m ready,
20 years old I was born to kill, Its My free will
and I’ve chose this Hill, So Please Stand Stll
While I Blow your Fucken Head off through your Grill.

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i kind of got mixed feelings from this piece. The flow was a bit off and the structure was ok. The rhyming scheme was off at parts which threw off the flow. The topic was good but at the end you mixed it with killing little kids. Try raising up your vocab and making this intoa whole song, if you can keep it on topic and not talk baout saving lives then killin kids. It don't match like that. Try also to raise the syllables in your rhymes. Keep it up tho and return the favor.

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eh, this was ok, structure and flow seemed off, at some points lines didn't even rhyme, a good topic though just need to work on it a lil more, keep it up man

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Not that great..

Work on flow/vocab..