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07-12-05, 02:13 PM
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Simply Dope
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Sorry... The Banks Closed...
IP: F73C 5E7B
~I'm walking up to the door thinking in my head~ ~Just gona get the money and get out... leavin nobody dead~ ~Hear the ring of the door when i open it~ ~Rolled up a blunt 10 minutes ago... just finished smoking it~ ~Straight blunted with the deagle on my side~ ~My home boy outside waiting for me in the getaway ride~ ~Look around... all the customers left the store~ ~Pull out the gat and tell him to open the drawer~ ~Now i just gota get the money and get out quick~ ~Dudes taking his time and im starting to flip~ ~Bandana's starting to slip... sweats starting to drip~ ~But im holding that piece with a tight grip~ ~Drawers empty... bags full... aight dip~ ~Im sitting in the black lac out back~ ~Smoking that bud sack... bumping that pac track~ ~Starting to wonder where dudes at~ ~After this my moneys gona stack~ ~Ok now he starting to come back~ ~Change the track... and grab a cig out the pack~ ~2 of amerikaz most wanted starts to play~ ~And our run from the police starts today~ ~Get out of my way... im like a runaway~ ~All that money got me staring in dismay~ ~Looking away... damn now the cars going astray~ ~Bout to be two rich niggas in the dirt waiting to decay~ ~Arriving on the scene... shit aint looking good~ ~Another case of robbery... aint shit in the hood~ ~Talking to the worker tellin me "this is where he stood"~ ~Broke into the safe and took what he could~ ~Pulled out a gun and told me to fill the bag~ ~Couldnt see his face... he was wearing a rag~ ~Got out with the money and grabbed the tape~ ~Then i arrived... he was barely able to escape~ ~Hes gone now so i better call back up~ ~The list of charges on him is starting to stack up~ |
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07-12-05, 02:14 PM
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IP: F73C 5E7B
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07-12-05, 10:49 PM
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Simply Dope
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IP: F73C 5E7B
uppin.........................
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07-13-05, 04:25 AM
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Whys That?
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IP: 5285 DC82
hmm.
simple,yet efective..some good imagery used. flow fucked up every now and then. you shoudl try up your vocab and originality fams, this sorta topic is played.. i couldnt picture this in a song, it would just be too boring. No hate,just truth. |
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07-14-05, 12:05 AM
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Simply Dope
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IP: F73C 5E7B
Thanks for the feedback... i thought of the idea a while ago but i just decided to make it the other day... upping...
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07-14-05, 12:42 AM
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Get Stomped.
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IP: B8E2 5DD6
yo i thought this was dope man flowed nicly very easy to read ........dope imagery
vocab wasnt that bad i found tha structure good also....nuthin to fault on this fam dope drop i think this should be om of tha month and thats werd 
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07-14-05, 01:56 AM
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Banned: Biting
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IP: 5285 DC82
upping for fam.
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07-14-05, 06:20 PM
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Simply Dope
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IP: F73C 5E7B
Thanks for the feed fam... upping this shit...
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07-14-05, 06:52 PM
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IP: 0522 9CD1
The flow was ok and the vocab was descent. The whole topic got played out after eminem did it in his criminal song. I did enjoy this though, don't get me wrong, but i got confused after i got to the character switch in the third verse. It had good story telling and the whole thing was a good piece. The only thing was that you talked about the whole ciggars too much...keep it up tho. Return tyhe favor to the Open Mics in my sig.
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07-14-05, 08:10 PM
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The Rise
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IP: DDE7 EADB
this was a good drop...vocab was nicely input...and it all flow
well together...your structure was nice but in some parts like the beginning it was kinda stretched then got perfect...the whole concept was cool...so original....keep the work up overall this was a good piece-8/10.....~1~ |
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07-15-05, 11:52 AM
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Simply Dope
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IP: F73C 5E7B
Thanks for the feed again... upping one more time...
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07-15-05, 11:59 AM
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Above Originality
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IP: D40E 67D5
ayo the drop was ill....lines were kinda iffy but besides that it was ill.....flow went nice....creativity was good.........uppin this hot joint.........keep it real homie!!!
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07-15-05, 12:39 PM
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Nt Your Average
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IP: D39C E7C3
flow went off a bit at times but u stayed on topic and the result woz ill simple but very effective !!
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