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08-03-05, 07:07 AM | #1 | ||||
Odi et Amo
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War
IP: 0242 C293
War
Innocent children crying, soldiers dying on foreign grounds Terrifying sounds like a boxing match with infinite rounds Bombs continue to consume as the announcers of doom Leading souls to their tomb, covering cities in grim gloom When war has begun: daughters and sons carrying guns No matter who won...mothers will grieve more than once Streets filled with blood tracks to express the hard facts Of many ruthless attacks where there's no time to relax Bodies stacked in piles with overlooking hostile smiles Death sentences without trials stuffed in nameless files Not your country or wife but you are fighting for your life With a mere rusty knife, you try to end this brutal strife Mr. Bush, I've come to ask you about this devil's pact Is your conscience still intact or do you put up an act? How do you sleep at night with this sight on your mind? How can you stay blind for the rights of our mankind? Doesn't all the oil and blood get sticky on your hands? When your commands continue to destroy other lands You're the core of this war but simply choose to ignore The fallen corps so next time: do your own dirty chore! Left feedback to: Life Struggles - Doc Holiday
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08-03-05, 12:07 PM | #2 | |||||||
RV aint Dead
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IP: 4D83 16A6
goood drop i like
dese lines spoke out to me When war has begun: daughters and sons carrying guns No matter who won...mothers will grieve more than once Streets filled with blood tracks to express the hard facts Of many ruthless attacks where there's no time to relax Bodies stacked in piles with overlooking hostile smiles ovarall nice
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08-03-05, 01:46 PM | #3 | |||||||
+...Femin-iLL...+
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IP: 6E69 7B24
Imma give two feeds...One Deep...and One...Just Making Yu Look Lyke The Shit....lol
OMG, this was so fuckin RAW....yu are so iLL....please have my babies....lol nawwww.....but i lyked this....imagery was real good.... keep writin ma.... *deeper feed back comin later*
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08-05-05, 10:22 AM | #4 | ||||
Odi et Amo
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IP: 0863 A6B6
Both of you thanks for the feed y'all!
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08-05-05, 01:29 PM | #5 | |||||
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IP: F9A3 F671
This was tight.. flow was overall pretty solid.. good word choice.. and you kept to the same topic throughout the whole verse.. Some shits kinda moving..
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08-06-05, 06:04 AM | #6 | ||||
Odi et Amo
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IP: 3B5E 91B9
^Thanks for the feed boy...
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08-06-05, 04:55 PM | #7 | ||||||
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IP: C6B7 3DF5
Wut up Drama Queen? Yeah definatly a good verse. You was talking bout somethin that was so real. Ya joint was easy to understand, minus some big words, but the overall very easy to grasp. I didn't have to try to create a flow for ya joint, the shit was well written and well thought out. Keep doin ya thing shorty.
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