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Old 06-01-05, 11:02 PM   #1
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OSB and Os1ris.. Just read it

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Savoring this? You seem distant of what this consisted of,
Praying for bliss, place me below and your ego trips above,
Waving my fist as your hate begins to eclipse my love,
May I insist I attach this scripture to the wings of doves,
Never placed a thing above, insist that I clinged too snug,
As my shoulders collapse from pain yours begin to shrug,
Poking at my absence of purity till your fingers numb,
You think its glum? More a sense of this as I'm drinking rum,
Act my fucking age? Thinking of you as I'm bickering on,
In a drunken rage listening to the angels singing a song,
Theres something caged, so as I'm thinking and singing along,
I crumble the page, and hear everything and ringings prolonged,
Buzzing in my ears, having a little displacement of thoughts,
Coming one with my fears, as my life is placed in a pause,
I'm running to the mirror, because all of my patience is lost,
Becoming too impaired, open the cabinet and breaking it off,
Shaking the bottles, hoping to hear pills, taking them all,
Comforted much but getting no where like i'm facing a wall,
Again crumble the page, imagining my securities dissolving,
You're coming of age... Seems you're maturites evolving,
11 months today, storm out so i can wash away the rain,
Even from past to present, it always remains the same..

Os1ris

I split up wit' my girl that shit aint workin'
Day by day we learnt it doubts growin' lurkin
In the wilderness now no paths no paths to follow
I left her house an' can't go back tommorrow
In life I roam whichever road I'm shown mind blown
Jus' let my rhymes flow, salvation in which I find hope
Sinkin' try an' float lyrical life raft or mind boat
I'm known for flows an' tokin' dope when I blow I glow
When I go for broke so sit an' chill wit ya chosen smoke
I'll get this shit off'a my motherfukin' shoulders yo
I've no more hope my woes have broken my will to cope
Feel like I've been blown open, emotionally
Frozen these hoes jokin' wit me I focus an' see
No hopin' in me heart broken my road's slopin' too deep
Now I'm tokin' my weed playin' cds soakin' in beats
Feel like I jus' wanna cut my wrists open an' bleed
Pull a trigger or get a noose in a rope on a tree
Hopin' to sleep but can't since this pain's woken in me
Good excuse for flowin', inside I'm growin'at least
Showin' these peeps that I'm not goin' to freak
I'm too worn out for that like I been rowin' in peat
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Old 06-01-05, 11:15 PM   #2
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Old 06-01-05, 11:50 PM   #3
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wordness!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

big props to my OG's, this was really good.......OSB, fuck you've evolved so much, probly that music i sent you .....seriously, i loved how your verse had such a harmonic flow, or whatever, everything seemed to rhyme, great multis which creates an excellent flow....and some lines were awesome, and stood out

Waving my fist as your hate begins to eclipse my love,
May I insist I attach this scripture to the wings of doves,
Act my fucking age? Thinking of you as I'm bickering on,
In a drunken rage listening to the angels singing a song,

^ my fav lines anyways.........really good piece man, we so have to do a collab soon (its just because im lazy, nah mean?) haha, but serioulsy, word

os1ris man, havn't read much of your shit, but this was pretty good....good flow, and great expression....you didn't really at the start, but towards the middle and end, you had good inners, which made it more interesting/flowed awesome.....word, you have some sweet talent my boy, keep up:

I'll get this shit off'a my motherfukin' shoulders yo
I've no more hope my woes have broken my will to cope

^ that line really stood out, there was a few more that were good too, but overall, it was really good.......word, keep up to both.....YAY!!!
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Old 06-02-05, 07:39 AM   #4
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Thanks... IF YOU LOOK AT IT LEAVE FEED FOR GOD SAKES!!!
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Old 06-02-05, 06:12 PM   #5
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uppin...... damn
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Old 06-02-05, 11:29 PM   #6
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Wow...

OSB, you continue to amaze me man. One of the best pieces I've seen from you. Topic was dope, rhyme scheme was dope, shit this was just dopeness
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Until Os1ris dropped his verse

LOL just playin homeboy You just added to perfection. Great emotion in both verses, and I dont no what else to say except for good job

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Old 06-03-05, 02:17 PM   #7
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i agree wit the dude above.....dopeness.....really different flows but they merged well for this particular piece......im already ready for more
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Old 06-19-05, 12:02 AM   #8
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wait holy shit... anyway.... uppin this old shit thats slept on like bed sheets
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Old 08-22-05, 12:57 AM   #9
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Wtf?!?!?! Why does this have like 4 feedback posts. fuck that uppin
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Old 08-22-05, 06:54 PM   #10
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RV fucking sucks. All the crap gets feed.
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Old 08-22-05, 11:54 PM   #11
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OSB i thought you were just average but damn you proved me wrong Seriously!
Cause this shit was str8 fire mad props to OSB and Os1ris this should be nominated
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Old 08-23-05, 04:52 AM   #12
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i can see both of yall are elevatin, OSB you came very good, nice flow good stucture held nice together, good vocab a few multiples hittin good, but you use a lot of the basic rhyme get more witty man, osiris not bad your flow was most def good, nice stucture but you lack creativty get into the emotion more get good wit multiples and upp your vocabulary, anyway overall this isn't bad a lil below average but not bad, keep elevatin.

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