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09-09-05, 05:33 AM | #1 | |||||
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-She Like-
IP: 5510 817C
Aight Look,Quick Keystyle type ish right here She like a beatiful sunray maybe some day i can stop the gun play an watch my son play at the epic of this shit she was eyeballin me told her to hit me up...but she aint try callin me she like sugar an spice sweet flavor so i axed for a favor like ima slave-her she blew me off said see you later big change thinkin big things flipped up with tha big range now im in capital gold digger range i can see tha dollar sign spot gave a cold shoulder drop before i got out she said "Stop now she wanna get to know me i told i flow an write poetry got her on tha line money is time but -i-know-she- wanna come home wit me tryna play me for my pockets now ima street dude so i aint gon knock it you cant hustle a hustler baby girl tripped up busted a busta exposed her true epidemic but i been playin her i never trusted her this superior female figure i cracked her criteria but what she lacked was tha fact id die nearin her like a epilouge im readin this girl like tha back of book took her for a crook thought she had me with one look ---------------------------------------------------- At the end of the story this happens all tha time thought id clear tha shit up witta couple of lines |
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09-09-05, 09:29 AM | #2 | |||||
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IP: 352B 2918
what can i say......let me just put it as, this was ok..but im not a big fan of verses to chicks dude.
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09-09-05, 09:40 AM | #3 | |||||
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^We can battle if you like?....
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09-09-05, 10:00 AM | #4 | |||||||
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IP: 352B 2918
straight verse dude, why you hittin on the newbs?...rofl!
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Urban Expression ayo...we need ppl come and check it out Can You Do Us A Favour And Vote (2)Ikaros vs Aitz(0) I Will RTF |
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09-09-05, 10:46 AM | #5 | |||||
I have a lot to learn...
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Good shit man. I was feelin it. Im too tired to leave any helpful feed though -_-
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09-09-05, 01:40 PM | #6 | ||||
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Drop 2 links or this will be closed
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The Competition
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09-18-05, 08:09 PM | #7 | |||||||
Bringin The Rukas
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IP: 3240 794D
its good and had a flow i liked it
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09-18-05, 08:40 PM | #8 | |||
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IP: 3240 794D
Eh, The Only Thing It Really Had Was Good Flow.
Cuz You Used That Two Syllabol Multie Scheme Throughout. But It Lacked Strong Enough Metas ... You Had A Lot Of Chances For Dope Metas And Detailed Emotion, Beings How You Were Writing About A Woman, ... But You Just Lacked Them And Missed The Opportunities. Never The Less, Good To See You Back ... I'll Be Watching For A More Polished Piece. |
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09-18-05, 09:39 PM | #9 | ||||||
Coming to Kill you All
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IP: 0AFC 5CA5
Flow wuz nice in this.But content lack a lot.Wuzn't all that creative or interesting.I got a lil bored in it to be honest.Concept itself wuz a lil cliche as well too.But...i guess for a keystle..it's ite.Just work on content.
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09-19-05, 06:15 AM | #10 | |||
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IP: 0825 899A
... Return The Favor On My Piece:
"Rainy Days" ft. Makaveli Trained |
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