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10-02-05, 10:06 PM
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Do Re Mi
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'tears of a mother'
IP: CE81 12D4
'Tears of a Mother'
her consience is dead, dead as the love she once had two hearts entwined but in truth it was a lie her vital organ ripped in two as the words came upon her ears 'its over' followed by tears and a trembling in her knees she fell to the ground at once face white as the clouds above as he turned his back, she too turned her back on the world no longer a word... language was a forgotten past emotions whiped from her eyes now a black stare return the look of hatred in her sight a path to madness she walks her mind runs fast not even a moments time to think thoughts of the unspeakable a sin to end all sins with a stroke of her instrument... she writes 'dear mother....' not a word in her mind can describe what she need say a stroke of ink once more... still not but two words... she realized the only way... not words but with action she shall explain her torment with an expression of pain her hearts blood runs cold, a blade gently presented to flesh a single motion.... a tear runs down a face once dry as the veins of kin a black veil to conceal the pain with resides in all who attend this love will not end... continuing through death and departure stone engraved with a name, never to be forgotten a daughters pain now passed on to her mother now left with no one to cherish... a birth made void all she has now is her tears and a note... 'dear mother' http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=206746 http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2468377
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10-03-05, 02:03 AM
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IP: CF74 5D3A
wow! you're just too deep for me home this was dead serious nice drop
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10-03-05, 06:17 AM
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1926
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IP: 0825 899A
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10-03-05, 06:40 AM
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HAHAHAHAH!..i onno
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IP: 1D2D 3134
good drop sick..
umm..here's how it came to me.. i love the concept, vocabulary was good, emotion was very nice, you had me with every line nothing was dull, but could have rhymed a couple of lines but that is ok.. maybe we could collab sometime with a poetic touch of "something... peep "My Life Vol.1..."
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10-03-05, 06:41 PM
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Do Re Mi
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IP: CE81 12D4
^ iight def. thanks for the feedback people..
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