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Old 10-11-05, 06:58 PM   #1
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..Phone Tapped..

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http://community.rapverse.com/showt...658#post2484658
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2485444


Scene: Walks To The Pay phone All Black Puts His hood Over His Head..

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The Streets is Watching..They Playing Me Close...
They got They Eyes On Me Getting Phone Tapped by 5-0..
Got me Ducking And Dodging The Feds Running Layin Low...
Cant Make Moves Making Calls From The Payphone..
Dont Want To see Me Make it Like Twista And Treysongs...
No nigga i cant Trust Right Hand Want To Play Wrong...

The Streets is Talking..Pushing Me to The Limit...
Being Fake friends But Enemies Want to knock Me Out Position...
Cant Catch me off Guard,they trying To Out Hustle My Bussiness..
i Wont drop a Wrong Sentence..Since the Cops Want 2 listen..
Friends Turn to Worste nightmares if Yoy Dont Pay Attention..
Never Fold underpressure If These niggaz Start Snitching..

The Streets is Watching..Im Still Paid..
They Dont Like Me Want See Me 6feet Wit A grave...
Im Counting change..Why they at the District giving names..
No News report,In the DA's office is it the haters To Blame?

The Streets is looking
..Im giving the Middle finger...
I never Cared Thats Why I Ride When it comes 2 danger..
Cuz yo Crew A turn on You Quicker than a Stranger..
Thats Why They Way out The Leauge Stepping In the Majors..
My phone Rang-its one Of My Boys on the Block
Said he Watching close Right Hand Man chattin wit the cops...
My Phone Rang-Its My Cuzin Wanting to see Wuts goin down..
Said he hearing That our names is poppin up out of town...
My phone Rang-My brother And My Boy tellin Me Wutever they got My back..
i Told Im A hit Em Back-Becuase My phones tapped..

Phone Hangs Up....
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Old 10-11-05, 08:53 PM   #2
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Yo Can i get Some FeedBack Some Compliments
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Old 10-11-05, 10:36 PM   #3
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Anything???feed Back this Site aint active like it used 2 be..
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Old 10-12-05, 03:28 AM   #4
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this was off the hook

now wht im feelin the most is the way you set up the verses i.e ''the streets watchin etc.''
it rhymed fluently n'd volcabulary was up to a gud standard but cud do with mor bigger words ... not too much tho, structure... good try keep it level (lines ruffly same length)
good use of multi's and very mind gribbin discriptions as well high creativity--rare topik

.........yep thts it

OVERALL SHARE DOPENESS !!! /9.97
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Old 10-12-05, 03:49 PM   #5
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i wish i knew you was doing this i would of collabo with you on it, i would of been the friend or whatever you feel me danm nice drop thou good flow you stood on topic and all nicely done we would of killed it still hot thou 8/10
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Old 10-12-05, 04:12 PM   #6
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Drop two links homie to OM's you have left feedback on or this will be closed
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Old 10-12-05, 05:38 PM   #7
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topic is dope as fuck..haha very rare as lady lyrical said
good use of multies
imagery is dope too yo
structure is dope

9.8/10 all love no hate
dope drop famm peace
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Old 10-12-05, 06:35 PM   #8
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yeah bro this is a dope peice, nice concept, good imagry, nice use of your vocabulary, i liked the structure and just the whole piece was dope.. woulda been good as a collab...
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Old 10-12-05, 06:44 PM   #9
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feelin this gangsta ass piece homie..keep at it and i like tha way you do this...maybe we can cypher or collab or sumthin like that sumtime...anyway,nice job on this piece mayne...keep at it...hit my open mics up,they are called From below The Bottom To Above The Top and A Tragic Tale...hit me bak
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Old 10-12-05, 08:37 PM   #10
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thanx for the feed...uppin....
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Old 10-12-05, 09:02 PM   #11
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Two words: Didn't like it because I was bored and it was unoriginal, and it wasn't worded in a way that caught my attention nor was it any good by my standards. It was mediocre. 6/10
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Old 10-12-05, 09:19 PM   #12
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aight thanx ill work on that...
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Old 10-13-05, 05:58 PM   #13
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uppin for more feed back please....
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Old 10-13-05, 07:43 PM   #14
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9/10 MAN EASILYshit was ill....................
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Old 10-13-05, 09:24 PM   #15
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thanx man appreciate the feed back...
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