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10-18-05, 11:30 AM
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You Are God.
IP: A6B6 B3A8
You are God
Can we please have a moment of silence for lives lost to religion ….. …. … .. . Irish green was wasted, replaced with dusty colors forming an awning The place were dew couldn’t settle and birds to scared to sing in the morning Warming pollution coated and was found devoted to the air If the majority isn’t making an effort the minority’s facing despair The local square was captured, enraptured by the Irish terror Found home ground to warfare for the catholic, protestant error The weather turned for the worse, a curse fell upon the estate Weather is a trend setter.. ..For worse or better gifted the Catholic’s feelings of hate Irate emotions and religious devotions, eased the Catholics mission Ambition to represent tradition.. ..Had them taking more blood than Crips within prison The Protestants position was situated directly opposite their spot As the plot grew thicker, so did the cloud cushioning the chimney pot The tension got intense due to suspense but they remained calm Thunder witnessed the men kneel and rest their heads within their palms “Let us pray” “Oh mighty lord above us, love us and offer support next to me Only sacrificing life’s to endeavor, ever so closer to your ecstasy Guide us to the light, as we fight for you in order to learn Each cup of blood captured feeds you energy for your return Our concern for your world is curled up within our aggression An obsession for happiness.. ..Can often result in deep depression But our confessions enable us a stable footing that’s exposed And when we kill the none believes we pray your gates are closed You are my God”. “Let’s do it” The Catholic’s started to panic, manic of making this worthwhile While one cocked his weapon the other one grimed with a smile Versatile with passion, crisp and light on their feet as they traveled Present with each step past their destiny, as their future unraveled And as they gathered outside the destination, grenades by their side Detonation was thrown, as a drop of sweat followed the ammunition inside The target had subsided the building, and had fled from within And left a lost mother grasping in her withered arms his offspring. “Children let us pray” “Lord I am not scared, I was prepared for the damage life courses Within a breath of fresh air, it’s only natural to take pauses And if you sacrifice my life, tonight I no its heaven I’m seeing Cause I sacrificed my life to raise you two healthy beings And I no it sounds odd, but if it’s me give me the nod As there is no better time to see you, you are my God.” R.I.P to all the families lost to religion.
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10-18-05, 03:12 PM
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IP: B219 80DD
K ?
I thought i've seen this before, maybe on rb, thought it was by you but if not then whatever.. I thought the structure and flow was real nice, set up the story beautifully. Loved the ending "R.I.P all the families lost to religion" - so true. Your vocab was alright, difference between long words and rare ones. the flow was on point throughout with internals helping it along. nice drop. http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=211923
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10-18-05, 03:15 PM
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Drop two links or this will be closed
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The Competition
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10-18-05, 05:11 PM
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Maggot
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IP: A6B6 B3A8
Barr who is you?
links 2moz.
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10-18-05, 05:39 PM
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Just searching.
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IP: 3F7D ED7B
Bitten of K from RB. Prove you're K.
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10-18-05, 05:42 PM
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Just searching.
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IP: 3F7D ED7B
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...ighlight=awning
Yeah, K is Cool. I've talked to him on AIM, dope topical head. |
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10-18-05, 05:45 PM
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A Life Of Chryme
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IP: 0825 899A
tsk tsk tsk ho
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10-18-05, 05:53 PM
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Just searching.
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IP: 3F7D ED7B
Nevermind, that's K. Welcome to RV, let's topical nicca.
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10-18-05, 05:58 PM
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Maggot
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IP: A6B6 B3A8
lmfao...word this is K.
somone clean this shit up please.
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10-18-05, 06:06 PM
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A Life Of Chryme
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IP: 0825 899A
ummmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm oooops
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10-19-05, 08:04 AM
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IP: A6B6 B3A8
word.
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10-19-05, 06:00 PM
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IP: 60C4 4739
i happen to think that this was dope
kept me reading topic was on hit i like the way you turned dictation to visualization keep blessing 1 |
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10-20-05, 09:36 AM
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IP: A6B6 B3A8
thanks.................
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10-23-05, 05:25 PM
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Witness, 4 God, 4-Ever
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this was good, flow and structure were nice, imagery and emotion were also good, keep up the good work
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 i come from a time when you earned respect, for your rhyme and the way you made words connect, not the money that you made or the girls you sexed, a concept you obviously haven't heard of yet Mars Ill
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